Maybe I should take suggestions from you, the guy who runs the site which currently looks like this? ... His site should mean nothing to you. Actually, what should mean something to you is that he criticized your grammar. Interesting though, he did use a fragment at the end of his critique. "Needs a lot of work" is not a sentence. So maybe he should double check his post before he criticizes someone for doing what he does. Therefore, take what you can from the other critiques, but ignore those who simply have nothing to say. :D First off, you must have me confused with someonelse, as I do not run a website. Secondly there is a big difference in critiquing ones grammar on a message board compared to a term paper that is going to be handed in to be graded. Like I said I wasn't trying to denigrate him it was more a critique of how little grammar is taught in school anymore. Critique the grammar in my posts if you would like, I have been out of school for close to 15 years and do not do a lot of writing in my field, I do not claim to be perfect nor do I proofread everyone of my posts. You asked for opinions/critique I gave it to you. Take it or leave it you don't have to try and personally attack me. general criticism without suggestions on how to correct problems wasnt solicited and really doesnt do anything except possibly falsely bolster the critics ego by tearing down others, just seems kinda mean spirited. Saber was looking for help with his ROUGH DRAFT, seeking outside proof readers is actually quite intelligent and industrious, i think the point is, if you have nothing constructive to add then why open your trap? maybe if you are so disgusted with the education system, you could start a thread in "rants." no need to bust on a kid who is actually putting forth the extra effort to see that his assignment is as good as he can make it before he turns it in. Point taken. I wasn't trying to bash anyone, I guess my point was taken the wrong way. I thought the content of the article was interesting and never said anything about the effort that was put forth.